The life of Jaquestiney. Volume 1

[Bravefighter-wyrmrest-accord (Bravefighter)]

Make it part of your story, would be very interesting to read.

[Jaquestiney-area-52]

Make it part of your story, would be very interesting to read.

Hmm. Like being redeemed to become a blood elf somehow from an undead? And have a backstory of how I was once a high elf? It would explain the whole getting married to Melantha thing I guess as I don’t think forsaken and blood elves marry usually.

[Khaldun-laughing-skull (Khaldun)]

My one request: paragraph please:)

[Jaquestiney-area-52]

My one request: paragraph please:)

I will try better next time. I tried doing the first long paragraph but I didn’t know where exactly it would be appropriate to separate it.

[Stéampunk-fizzcrank (Stéampunk)]

I woke up, and as I stumbled through the room into the living room into the kitchen to find my wife Melantha as she was making my morning coffee and pancakes. And so I ate that, said my goodbyes to Melantha for the day and head outside the house to walk around Orgrimmar.

I would start a new paragraph after this seeing how you changed locations as an example.

[Jaquestiney-area-52]

I woke up, and as I stumbled through the room into the living room into the kitchen to find my wife Melantha as she was making my morning coffee and pancakes. And so I ate that, said my goodbyes to Melantha for the day and head outside the house to walk around Orgrimmar.

I would start a new paragraph after this seeing how you changed locations as an example.

Good point. I think I was just in a rush to post it honestly so I was like screw it.

[Stéampunk-fizzcrank (Stéampunk)]

I always have issues writing a story here, I learned to use my writing program and copy/paste to the forums. greta story though keep it up

[Flebswife-moon-guard]

This is like Fleb before his brain rotted…

[Bruvnondus-dalaran (Bruvnondus)]

I give this story a 5/7.

[Stéampunk-fizzcrank (Stéampunk)]

Also if you ever read my stories, just look and see how many times I edited LOL I too get into a hurry.

[Momimfotm-dragonmaw (Momimfotm)]

Needs more gnomes being one shot by insta cast chaos bolts. Good read though.

[Zarles-zuljin]

Well I mean besides Forsaken, blood elves are the best race. I’m even considering race changing to BE at this point. I can’t decide if I really wanna do it or not though.

silently, harshly judging

[Pheonia-azuremyst (Pheonia)]

Looking forward to more.

[Carissaria-aggramar]

know this was very long and probably not as good and not a lot of people were involved this time around but I promise I will add more people as things go on and the story will get better, because this is only the beginning of a very long book series. I just need to get things rolling, because if I just start with the climax, y’all wouldn’t have no idea whats going on and how it got there. Anyways I hoped you enjoyed.

Better than mine

[Kypookins-baelgun (Kypookins)]

I woke up, and as I stumbled through the room into the living room into the kitchen to find my wife Melantha as she was making my morning coffee and pancakes. And so I ate that, said my goodbyes to Melantha for the day and head outside the house to walk around Orgrimmar.

Should have been the first paragraph. That would have broken up that initial “Wall of text” more. You could have broken it up in a couple of other places, too.